Come to the virtual prep workshop 8 pm, October 23rd (Sunday).

We'll do a writing prompt warm-up (these are fun and can be helpful) and some pre story walls. To do one of those, try to summarize your novel in 5-7 sentences and prepare some questions you'd like to have help answering.

--Tim

newmexicokid [8:00 PM]
http://cdn.meaningfullife.org/wp-content/uploads/2014/10/abstract-art-paint-wallpaper-for-background-835x415.jpg (65KB)

[8:01]
I was thinking that for a writing prompt warm-up for tonight, perhaps we could try to find some abstract images.

terilavelle [8:01 PM]
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newmexicokid [8:02 PM]
Hello, folks!

[8:02]
Welcome to the third online prep workshop :slightly_smiling_face:

katmeow [8:02 PM]
Good evening

newmexicokid [8:02 PM]
http://www.tinagutierrezartsphotography.com/uploads/1/8/7/4/18743496/1907208_orig.jpg (106KB)

johnthetech [8:03 PM]
Hail, Tim!

bdillvarga [8:03 PM]
Hi All:

johnthetech [8:03 PM]
Howdy

newmexicokid [8:03 PM]
We'll start off in #general

alkamy [8:03 PM]
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johnthetech [8:03 PM]
Yeah my bad I jumped back in where I was last time.

alkamy [8:03 PM]
Hello all

newmexicokid [8:04 PM]
Interesting image, @ellieroth

[8:04]
Wow, autocorrect doesn't work!

[8:04]
alkamy

katmeow [8:04 PM]
I like that a lot

[8:04]
Lol Tim

newmexicokid [8:05 PM]
I started typing @alkamy and somehow it came out @ellieroth (who isn't even on right now)

melanisticmoon [8:05 PM]
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alkamy [8:05 PM]
LOL

[8:05]
Sweet, melanisticmoon. Is that Chuhuli (sp?)?

newmexicokid [8:06 PM]
Fascinating image, Molly. Makes me think of my trip to Murano.

johnthetech [8:06 PM]
Thought you typed Cthulhu. Got excited for a second.

melanisticmoon [8:06 PM]
Haha. You can interpret it that way.

alkamy [8:06 PM]
Oh, now that would be awesome, John.

katmeow [8:06 PM]
Oh I'm glad i wasn't the only ones

melanisticmoon [8:06 PM]
Oh, so did I.

newmexicokid [8:06 PM]
That's why I was thinking abstract images might make an interesting writing prompt for tonight.

melanisticmoon [8:07 PM]
Agreed.

newmexicokid [8:07 PM]
But first, let's see if anyone has any pre story walls they want to do or any NaNo related questions.

johnthetech [8:08 PM]
Kat and I are co-writing our book this year for fun and an extra challenge. We're trying to decide how best to lay it out to avoid insanity.

[8:09]
So far it looks like we'll alternate chapters from each of the two main characters pov.

bdillvarga [8:09 PM]
how do you upload an image?

katmeow [8:09 PM]
Hit the plus sign to the right

newmexicokid [8:10 PM]
You can also find images online and just post the URL to the image.

alkamy [8:10 PM]
I dragged a screenshot into the chat from my desktop

melanisticmoon [8:10 PM]
Or use copy/paste.

newmexicokid [8:11 PM]
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Composite of the four posted images thus far

newmexicokid [8:12 PM]
Fascinating (that copy/paste works)

bdillvarga [8:12 PM]
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melanisticmoon [8:12 PM]
On mobile, at least.

katmeow [8:13 PM]
That's the cellar where i keep my precious.....

newmexicokid [8:13 PM]
On desktop too.

[8:13]
So John and Kat--are you each sticking with one POV? Or are you taking turns with each character?

alkamy [8:13 PM]
John, that sounds like a solid plan. Are you waiting for each other's section before you write your next chapter?

newmexicokid [8:14 PM]
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katmeow [8:14 PM]
We are doing two pov characters, I'll be writing one character and John the other. We we're talking about alternating chapters

newmexicokid [8:15 PM]
Should be an interesting process.

johnthetech [8:15 PM]
I don't plan on waiting no.

katmeow [8:16 PM]
Right, i hope fun. I think it will be fun combining them into one.

johnthetech [8:16 PM]
I'm hoping we will have enough of a game plan to be able to store independently and then just mash together.

bdillvarga [8:16 PM]
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I like this one a lot!

katmeow [8:17 PM]
We are trying to have the plot planned out well enough to carry on our own journey without waiting for the other.

johnthetech [8:17 PM]
Although plot is ok me thing, characters and how they relate is another. My character might end up falling in love with hers only to have the corresponding chapter have her character go a different route.

katmeow [8:17 PM]
Will probably require a bit more editing. But i like editing.

alkamy [8:17 PM]
Might be challenging from a continuity perspective, but then again some interesting things might emerge.

melanisticmoon [8:17 PM]
And communication.

newmexicokid [8:17 PM]
John, isn't that just real life? :slightly_smiling_face:

katmeow [8:18 PM]
Touch

melanisticmoon [8:18 PM]
Do you have an outline?

johnthetech [8:19 PM]
Ha.

[8:19]
We're still fighting to come up with character names.

katmeow [8:19 PM]
Some of an outline...

newmexicokid [8:19 PM]
http://editorial.designtaxi.com/editorial-images/news-sannetatt13082015/1.jpg (123KB)

katmeow [8:20 PM]
Though we did get a title and the main character names down today.

newmexicokid [8:20 PM]
What would be interesting would be to have each of you write a POV from slightly alternate dimensions.

johnthetech [8:20 PM]
I'm ok with placeholder names but somehow I keep calling everyone something inappropriate.

[8:20]
Ooh that does sound fun Tim.

katmeow [8:20 PM]
I do like that

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katmeow [8:20 PM]
Oh that's cool

johnthetech [8:21 PM]
Nifty.

newmexicokid [8:21 PM]
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johnthetech [8:22 PM]
That one makes my brain hurt a bit.

newmexicokid [8:22 PM]
(reminds me of what I've seen in previews of Kubo and the Two Strings)

katmeow [8:22 PM]
I'm really good at pantsing some plot but i don't know who i really want my character to be.

melanisticmoon [8:23 PM]
Do they have a motive?

katmeow [8:23 PM]
It makes me think of Gaea

newmexicokid [8:23 PM]
Is this something you want help brainstorming, Kat? Or is it a matter of your internalizing your character?

newmexicokid [8:24 PM]
just had an idea for how to work in the alternate universes

katmeow [8:24 PM]
They are saving their friend and sister. I'm open for some help.

johnthetech [8:25 PM]
We can chat later about alternate universes if you want to get back on topic lol.

alkamy [8:25 PM]
Saving them from what? An evil inventor?

newmexicokid [8:25 PM]
Perhaps every 30 days (in sync with the moon), some of the alternate universes collapse so there are a finite set of universes. So your story worlds could sync up (in the hypothetical path of having alternate universes). But you're right, that's just another topic.

katmeow [8:26 PM]
Oh sorry gangsters and human traffickers

johnthetech [8:26 PM]
His sister her friend. One person. Was kidnapped

melanisticmoon [8:27 PM]
What's the developing relationship between the two protagonists?

newmexicokid [8:27 PM]
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katmeow [8:27 PM]
We were thinking an opposites attract kind of thing

alkamy [8:28 PM]
That image is creepy, Tim. Could be combined with the tattoo image.

johnthetech [8:28 PM]
The older brother Red-Wing is back living on the reservation and hasn't heard from his sister in a few days. She's away at college. Kats Character is a journalist type who had been interviewing the sister while she was at college doing a piece about the reservation.

newmexicokid [8:29 PM]
Nice setup.

melanisticmoon [8:29 PM]
That sounds interesting.

newmexicokid [8:29 PM]
How do they know each other? Red-Wing and Kat's character?

johnthetech [8:29 PM]
They both go looking for her and run into each other, join forces, then go looking for her while at the same time trying to make the perfect sandwich.

newmexicokid [8:29 PM]
Ah, meeting through the investigation.

katmeow [8:29 PM]
Bwhahaha

alkamy [8:30 PM]
Why was she kidnapped?

johnthetech [8:30 PM]
Red-Wing goes to the sisters apartment and hears noises and busts in only to find its the journalist also snooping for clues to the whereabouts of missing sister.

melanisticmoon [8:30 PM]
So maybe Red-Wing resents the journalism for sensationalizing his community's way of life?

johnthetech [8:31 PM]
She went with her roommate to go meet a guy (she went along for moral support and because she is naive).

newmexicokid [8:31 PM]
Are Red-Wing and his sister close? Might be interesting if there was some tension there.

melanisticmoon [8:31 PM]
How well do the journalist and sister know each other?

johnthetech [8:31 PM]
Red-Wing resents just about everything. He left the Rez at 18 to join the army and it disillusioned him to the world. He never wanted his sister to go in the first place.

[8:32]
They started as just interviewing but have been hanging out and meeting for coffee and whatnot for over a year.

alkamy [8:32 PM]
Is the roommate missing too? Maybe she knows more than she's saying.

katmeow [8:32 PM]
The roommate is with the sister.

johnthetech [8:32 PM]
But his sister wanted to be a vet so she got some scholarships and went off to UNLV a few hours away from the Rez.

newmexicokid [8:33 PM]
What is the journalist's background?

melanisticmoon [8:33 PM]
Maybe the roommate feels guilty for getting her friend into trouble?

[8:33]
Oh, nevermind.

johnthetech [8:33 PM]
Standard "he's strong/ she's smart" kind of team up. They don't know about the roommate when they meet up.

katmeow [8:34 PM]
She is actually investigating her grandmother who was a native

johnthetech [8:34 PM]
It may already be too late for the roommate anyways....

katmeow [8:34 PM]
The journalist that is

[8:34]
Duh duh duh!

johnthetech [8:35 PM]
The best part of being a writer imo is being able to kill off annoying people.

katmeow [8:35 PM]
True that

melanisticmoon [8:35 PM]
Is the journalist a well known /respected journalist? Does she have something to prove?

newmexicokid [8:35 PM]
always finds it hard to kill off characters.

johnthetech [8:36 PM]
I think Kats still struggling with personality and background for the journalist. So much more difficult than the giant native American head-cracker character.

newmexicokid [8:36 PM]
It could be interesting for the journalist to struggle between ambition/desperation-for-success and the desire to do the right thing.

katmeow [8:37 PM]
She is well respected, but right now she is just kind of doing her own thing. She was from the east coast but moved out to Vegas looking for info on her grandmother.

newmexicokid [8:37 PM]
Perhaps there is a colleague/rival who is also investigating the situation, seeking to scoop her.

[8:37]
(added pressure)

melanisticmoon [8:37 PM]
Paper or online journalist?

[8:37]
Are the police a source of conflict?

johnthetech [8:38 PM]
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Basing my character on T-Hawk from an old video game. Maybe just a wee bit stereotypical.

katmeow [8:38 PM]
But in the process she got close to this gentle naive native girl who had lived a very sheltered life on the reservation.

alkamy [8:38 PM]
What was the journalist's relationship with her Grandmother?

johnthetech [8:39 PM]
Back in the day native Americans were taken from the Rez and forced into white schools, often never seeing their families again. There may end up being a connection between them.

katmeow [8:39 PM]
Very close but her grandmother did not talk about her background until she had gotten very old. When the grandmother was a child she was taken from the reservation and put in an Indian school to be americanized

johnthetech [8:40 PM]
There is no real difference between paper and online journalism anymore. One is another. Police out there can't do much and wont do much else.

katmeow [8:40 PM]
The themes of the story are being true to your roots and relying on family and loved ones.

newmexicokid [8:40 PM]
Is Red-Wing's sister just a victim character? Or are you thinking to do a few POV scenes with her?

alkamy [8:40 PM]
That sounds good. Or maybe she never spoke about her background at all and the journalist discovered she was native American after her death?

newmexicokid [8:40 PM]
Nice themes, Kat

katmeow [8:41 PM]
Right now just a victim character

johnthetech [8:41 PM]
Eh. We talked about that but I'm thinking she isn't much in this book. Maybe if there is a sequel.

katmeow [8:41 PM]
Oh yeah that is a good idea alkamy. Thanks Tim

johnthetech [8:41 PM]
:)

[8:41]
I like it.

newmexicokid [8:41 PM]
Sometimes victim POV scenes can heighten tension and also make the victim someone more real to the reader.

[8:42]
It's harder to make them three dimensional (at least in my experience) otherwise.

melanisticmoon [8:42 PM]
Or flashbacks.

katmeow [8:43 PM]
I think it is something to come back to, but it would be a bit confusing for the mechanics of dual authoring for the first time

melanisticmoon [8:43 PM]
True.

newmexicokid [8:44 PM]
Rules are meant to be broken; you may find yourself drawn to alter the structure as you go.

johnthetech [8:44 PM]
She's annoying anyways.

melanisticmoon [8:44 PM]
If she's annoying, then why is the reader supposed to care about rescuing her?

katmeow [8:44 PM]
I tend to focus on the dimensions of just two to three characters in the first draft. Especially during nano.

johnthetech [8:44 PM]
No sorry. She is annoying to write about.

melanisticmoon [8:45 PM]
Oh, okay.

newmexicokid [8:45 PM]
Good thought, Kat.

johnthetech [8:45 PM]
Shes smart and beautiful and passionate and innocently open minded about the world.

katmeow [8:45 PM]
Lol he just thinks she's annoying because he can't call her squatting moo as e

newmexicokid [8:45 PM]
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Abstract images thus far

johnthetech [8:45 PM]
Squatting moose!

[8:46]
Sorry. Back to abstract images.

katmeow [8:46 PM]
I'm a cellar door kind of girl....

[8:46]
Ducking auto correct

newmexicokid [8:46 PM]
Should we do a quick writing prompt? How long would people like to write something?

writingstudent [8:46 PM]
oo a writing prompt!? I sure did come in at the right time!

bdillvarga [8:46 PM]
what is the prompt?

johnthetech [8:47 PM]
Welcome.

newmexicokid [8:47 PM]
One of the above images.

writingstudent [8:47 PM]
thanks, John!

katmeow [8:47 PM]
Meowdy

newmexicokid [8:47 PM]
Or perhaps all of them. Wait, Nelly--did you want to do a pre story wall before we do that?

writingstudent [8:48 PM]
Lets do a writing prompt!

newmexicokid [8:48 PM]
Okay. How many minutes?

writingstudent [8:48 PM]
I see a pic that has got me rather inspired

[8:48]
anything besides 11 or 13 :wink:

bdillvarga [8:48 PM]
where do we write it?

newmexicokid [8:48 PM]
Offline; we can stay on this channel, I think.

[8:48]
When people are done, they can paste them in here and we'll give some general feedback.

[8:49]
(optional, of course)

bdillvarga [8:49 PM]
oh, okay

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newmexicokid [8:49 PM]
Okay, so 12 minutes it is.

[8:49]
Everyone ready?

writingstudent [8:49 PM]
I'm good!

bdillvarga [8:50 PM]
yes, is there at timer?

katmeow [8:50 PM]
Not yet!

newmexicokid [8:50 PM]
Okay, Kat.

[8:50]
Barb, I'll set the timer.

[8:51]
Folks can start writing now if they're ready. Kat, let me know when to start the timer.

johnthetech [8:52 PM]
We had to boot up computers. Weve been outside enjoying the night with the puppies.

katmeow [8:53 PM]
OK I'm ready

newmexicokid [8:53 PM]
set up a reminder Stop writing in this channel at 9:05pm today, Central Daylight Time.

slackbot [9:05 PM]
Reminder: Stop writing.

katmeow [9:06 PM]
That was not so bad for me

bdillvarga [9:06 PM]
ok where do we put our draft?

newmexicokid [9:06 PM]
Just copy and paste it in here.

bdillvarga [9:07 PM]
Though she couldnt recall all of the details, Abigail would never forget the night her mother called the police. Her parents had been quarreling as usual, but that night it reached a level of intensity she had never before witnessed. She was only five, but she knew that to survive this night physically and emotionally she had to escape the screaming and increasing violence. She ran into the spare bedroom and slid under the trailing edge of one of the white bedspreads. She jammed her fingers in her ears for a time to muffle the angry voices. Eventually peaking out, she caught glimpses of her fathers raised arm, her mother covering her head in fear. Her mother must have called the police for after some banging on the front door, two officers with badges were restraining her father, patting her mothers back, and bringing temporary calm to the situation. Years later, the dreams began, but the strange thing was, the man with his arm raised was not her father. Each time she had the dream, she strained to see who he was. She had always believed her parents divorce was catalyzed by this night when her father became violent.
Now she was almost certain the man with the raised arm was.

newmexicokid [9:08 PM]
... who? (I am filled with a great desire to know!)

writingstudent [9:08 PM]
i need more info

katmeow [9:08 PM]
Tell us more!

writingstudent [9:08 PM]
please keep writing

foodfairy1 [9:08 PM]
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johnthetech [9:08 PM]
Emotion inducing. Well done.

bdillvarga [9:08 PM]
I would need another five minutes to figure that out...sorry/1

alkamy [9:09 PM]
LOL

newmexicokid [9:09 PM]
Hello, Sherry--welcome! We just are finishing a writing prompt based on this image: https://naperwrimo.slack.com/files/newmexicokid/F2T4D597G/pasted_image_at_2016_10_23_08_45_pm.png

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johnthetech [9:09 PM]
Damnit Damnit Damnit!!! Kelsea screamed as she threw the bottle against the wall. Of course it didnt break, that would be something interesting, and nothing here ever changed. She had tried keeping track of how many days she had been in the room, but no matter what she did; made notches on the wall, wrote down the days, even scratching marks into her arm, nothing ever took. Every day she woke up and it was gone.
The room. Cell. Prison. Whatever the twisted person that had locked her in referred to it as, she was certain she was never getting out. Each morning everything in the room was reset back to where it was, a handful of energy bars and a few bottles of water were sitting on the only table. The chair was always placed back in the same spot. Not at the table where it seemed to fit, but facing the wall. The Wall was all there was to keep Kelsea occupied each day. Upon the wall were eleven pictures. The basic plastic frames contrasted the colorful and vivid pictures within. Each one could tell an entire story in and of itself. Lined up in a straight horizontal row from one end of the room to another. In the center under them all was a single black button. The pictures could be easily removed from the tiny hook on the wall and moved around.
Damnit. Kelsea screamed again, suddenly realizing the only words she had spoken in weeks were all swear words. She pulled silenced girl back off the wall and placed it where owl tattoo was. Then she swapped hippy ceiling with flowers and pressed the button again. The red light on the ceiling began spinning and flashing while a klaxon loud enough to cause hearing loss sounded off. GOD DAMNIT!!.
She needed to think more. Otherwise she was just flying blind. As there was nothing else in the room but the bed, toilet, table, chair, and pictures, she had always assumed that finding the correct order of the pictures was the answer. A psychotic puzzle. She almost wanted to die rather than stare at those damn images for one more minute. And she was tired of eating just energy bars. Man she could do with a nice turkey sandwich right now.

newmexicokid [9:09 PM]
So people are sharing what they've written. Feel free to comment.

writingstudent [9:10 PM]
John I love it

newmexicokid [9:10 PM]
Nice, John! Compelling scene.

[9:10]
And you ended with a sandwich reference :wink:

bdillvarga [9:11 PM]
Wow, and you did that in 5 minutes, John?? Impressive....

johnthetech [9:11 PM]
Absolutely. Sandwiches and naps.

alkamy [9:11 PM]
That's fantastic, John.

johnthetech [9:11 PM]
I type fast I'm just not very creative.

newmexicokid [9:12 PM]
I like the premise you came up with.

johnthetech [9:12 PM]
Thank you. I'm an escape room freak.

katmeow [9:12 PM]
I think that was creative as hell

johnthetech [9:12 PM]
Who is next?

alkamy [9:12 PM]
Groundhog's Day meets Kafka

newmexicokid [9:12 PM]
"Shaddup and stop squirming."
The man was brusque. His fingers hurt where they dug into Caitlyn's shoulders. Her left eye throbbed but she tried to stop whimpering.
"I mean it!"
It all was too much for Caitlyn. She felt her stomach heave. She choked as vomit filled her mouth, spilling out over the front of her Red Hat t-shirt.
The two of them stood on the sidewalk. It was past midnight. Only a few other people were out. Even the passing traffic was sparse. No one paid any attention to them.
"You goddamn spaz."
Without warning he hit her side hard enough to make her retch again.
She spat out what was in her mouth.
His cruel grip tightened as he forced her to walk with him across the street towards the white van.
Caitlyn cast her gaze wildly around her. No one was paying any attention to them. She closed her eyes, feeling tears roll down her cheeks. When she had tried to scream earlier, that was when he hit her hard across her left eye. Now that eye was swollen.
*I wish Jerry was here*.
But Jerry wasn't. And there was nothing he would have been able to do against this muscle-bound, cruel man.
As they reached the white van door, a voice spoke out behind them.
"Excuse me. Miss, are you alright?"
Caitlyn's abductor slammed her into the side of the van, spun around, drew out a gun and fired twice, the sound muffled by his gun's silencer. His target, an older woman, fell heavily to the ground.

johnthetech [9:13 PM]
Lol so true alkamy

newmexicokid [9:14 PM]
This is much more violent than I usually write. But I was inspired by the abduction/kidnapping you two mentioned, Kat and John.

bdillvarga [9:14 PM]
Tim, you do such a nice job of showing as opposed to telling. NIce mix of dialogue, action, description....

johnthetech [9:14 PM]
Woo Tim that was some serious stuff there. And to have it happen to a Linux buff just increases the sadness.

newmexicokid [9:14 PM]
Thanks, Barb.

writingstudent [9:15 PM]
I love it! Teach me your ways, Tim!!

bdillvarga [9:15 PM]
So far all three are pretty violent

newmexicokid [9:15 PM]
Must be the images we chose.

[9:15]
Thanks, Nelly and John.

alkamy [9:15 PM]
Strong narrative, especially given the time constraints. Well done.

newmexicokid [9:16 PM]
Thanks, Kira.

katmeow [9:16 PM]
nicely done

newmexicokid [9:16 PM]
Thanks, Kat.

[9:16]
So who is next?

katmeow [9:16 PM]
The rambled old wood door smacked against the cold cement frame of the cellar startling Jane and her mare from their daydreaming. A wind gust sent the door cracking down once more and the sound sent a shiver down Janes spine. Was it that eerie noise amoungst the growing howl of the wind? Or was it something more sinister sweeping in with the wind?
Wether you know it or not your body senses the change in the atmosphere. Those raised hairs on your arm and neck, it is your body telling you to run. Jane was not the only one that sensed the change, her mare, Dusty began to grow impatient. Jane heeded her friend and urged Dusty to take them swiftly down their path back to the house.
Maybe 30 seconds had passed since Jane heard that first nerve rattling smack of wood against concrete, but already the sky had begun to darken. The wind was taking on a voice of its own as it whirled the loose earth in the sky.

melanisticmoon [9:17 PM]
I have no internet on my laptop. Could I take a picture of my screen and post it?

newmexicokid [9:17 PM]
Sure, Molly.

[9:18]
Kat--very nice atmospherics. I like how vivid the scene is.

katmeow [9:18 PM]
Thanks :slightly_smiling_face:

bdillvarga [9:18 PM]
I like your sensory detail, katmeow

johnthetech [9:18 PM]
I like how you rolled details into the story gracefully. Not all at once.

katmeow [9:18 PM]
Thanks bdillvarga

alkamy [9:19 PM]
Ditto what Barbara said. Good strong verbs too

melanisticmoon [9:20 PM]
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katmeow [9:20 PM]
Thanks! I think thats why I like writing action scenes so much :slightly_smiling_face:

newmexicokid [9:21 PM]
Wow, Molly--that was awesome.

[9:22]
Great imagery--and you had a killer last line.

writingstudent [9:22 PM]
you did that in the time constraint???

[9:22]
amazin work

melanisticmoon [9:22 PM]
Thanks. :blush:

johnthetech [9:22 PM]
Beautiful Molly. A perfect match for the abstract pictures is an abstract story. Heartfelt and dizzyingly awesome.

newmexicokid [9:22 PM]
"Fire paused mid-lick, hot mouths poised..." very evocative.

katmeow [9:23 PM]
I really like the way you described everything stoping and then going backwards.

newmexicokid [9:24 PM]
Yes, neat concept.

alkamy [9:24 PM]
It's like Genesis but in reverse. Very evocative. Love the last line

bdillvarga [9:24 PM]
I am wowed. To do that in five minutes is insanely brilliant!

johnthetech [9:25 PM]
Wait did we only have 5 minutes I thought it was more like 10 or 12.

newmexicokid [9:25 PM]
It was 12. But it flew by like five :wink:

[9:25]
Still brilliant writing.

melanisticmoon [9:26 PM]
These word wars are fun.

bdillvarga [9:26 PM]
You're right. I think I sat thinking for about five and then writing for five. Still in awe.

newmexicokid [9:26 PM]
:slightly_smiling_face:

[9:26]
The Journey used to have a jabber path--weekly meetings with writing prompts like these.

[9:26]
Some of us really loved those.

melanisticmoon [9:26 PM]
Will there be more during NaNo?

newmexicokid [9:27 PM]
Not during NaNo-- at least not writing prompts. Word wars, yes.

bdillvarga [9:27 PM]
Are there any other drafts? If not, I'm going to have to say Bye!

alkamy [9:28 PM]
Derrick struggled to open his eyes. When he did so, he was flooded with images. The outline of tree branches with impossibly bright leaves. Orange, green, red, yes, but blue ones too, even purple. It confused and disoriented him. He tried to shake his head, snap his vision back into focus. But doing so just made things worse. Now the brilliantly colored leaves faded to white and just one of the branches remained, its dark color a stark contrast to the white, looking like a seam or a rupture. Then, like liquid issuing forth from an abyss, a growing saturation of blues and purples. It was like viewing a microscopic slide. Derrick couldnt fathom what he was seeing. What had happened to his reality and to his grip on it?
The image started pulsating and began to morph, dreamlike, into another state. Now he saw before him a cellar door. For a moment he felt a great relief to see something that he could understand. But then he was overcome with a feeling of dread and felt something akin to nostalgia for the prior images. For there was something behind that door, he knew without knowing how he knew. Slowly the door began to creak open and he saw a set of eyes gone wide with horror. His breathing hitched as the light cast across the face revealing Clara.

melanisticmoon [9:29 PM]
Very colorful descriptions - literally!

newmexicokid [9:30 PM]
Very nice, Kira. I like the way you describe the shifting images and then you change the focus from disorientation to growing horror.

bdillvarga [9:30 PM]
I like how it seems you linked more than one image. Beautiful descriptions in the beginning. I like, too, when you say it "looked like a seam or a rupture!"

johnthetech [9:30 PM]
Vivid and horrifying! I love it.

alkamy [9:30 PM]
Thanks!

newmexicokid [9:30 PM]
wants to know who Clara is.

alkamy [9:30 PM]
I think she might be his daughter

johnthetech [9:30 PM]
Clara is the impossible girl..

katmeow [9:30 PM]
Nice ending too

newmexicokid [9:30 PM]
smiles.

katmeow [9:30 PM]
:smiley_cat:

johnthetech [9:30 PM]
:)

[9:31]
I like the "he knew without knowing" part

newmexicokid [9:31 PM]
Nelly, are you going to share yours?

writingstudent [9:32 PM]
I'm not all too satisfied so I'd rather not share tonight- hope that's ok!

katmeow [9:32 PM]
Wait Nelly's not just a mouse?!

newmexicokid [9:32 PM]
Sure--no pressure.

bdillvarga [9:32 PM]
Going to say good night! It's been fun....

katmeow [9:32 PM]
Teh he jjk

johnthetech [9:32 PM]
That is always absolutely fine

newmexicokid [9:32 PM]
Good night, Barb!

katmeow [9:32 PM]
Night barb

writingstudent [9:32 PM]
Lol!!

melanisticmoon [9:32 PM]
G'night.

writingstudent [9:32 PM]
night, barb!

alkamy [9:32 PM]
Good night Barb

newmexicokid [9:33 PM]
Sherry, did you have any NaNo questions?

[9:34]
If not, then I think we may be done for tonight?

johnthetech [9:34 PM]
Tim. You got any good prizes for write ins this year?

newmexicokid [9:34 PM]
I have some space-related sculpey sculptures :slightly_smiling_face:

katmeow [9:34 PM]
Nice

newmexicokid [9:34 PM]
And some "space stones"; and Sam and I made some buttons.

johnthetech [9:35 PM]
Excellent. I just finished making al my prizes tonight for the write ins Kat and I are hosting.

newmexicokid [9:35 PM]
:slightly_smiling_face:

[9:36]
Do post some pictures in the forums.

[9:36]
It always helps to encourage turn out.

katmeow [9:36 PM]
Well I'm off to sleep. Thanks everyone

newmexicokid [9:36 PM]
Good night, Kat!

johnthetech [9:36 PM]
True. I've. Even slacking in the forums.

[9:36]
Gnite everyone.

newmexicokid [9:36 PM]
Thanks, everyone!

[9:37]
I had a lot of fun tonight.

katmeow [9:37 PM]
Yes in deed

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alkamy [9:37 PM]
thanks. Good night